Rough Cut

Our teacher discussed ways in which we could improve our rough cut, these included:

- Put some titles over the shot, to enable more time for footage
- Editing to be adjusted on shot 2
- Alter the shot of the female to an over the shoulder shot
- Include more footage of the male character. For example, where is he going? Where does he end up? Change rooms and show his environment
- Classic shot of character falling over
- Put the last three titles over black
- Male character to clear up after himself


Our teacher said our footage was good, with effective shots. We had previously changed a few of our shots and this improved our rough cut effectively. What's more, it was our titles that really let us down on our footage; it was felt that they were unorganised and took up too much time - thus meaning that we had less footage, so the effect of our opening wasn't felt as it should be. We had arranged our titles to be at the start and end. Our teacher gave us some ideas on how we could alter our titles and create a more effective opening. Therefore, we changed our designs, and decided that putting titles over footage would create a better effect to the audience, while enabling us to give more footage to the audience. Having the titles over the footage means that the audience have less to focus on - rather than spending time looking at titles, they can get a sense of the atmosphere and keep with the narrative - keeping the suspense. Overall, our comments on the rought cut have highlighted what we need to change and how we can improve our opening. The most significant being the titles, we as a group feel that having the titles over the footage will have a much better impact on the audience.